Definition of entrance:
1) The right or opportunity to go into a place
2) An act of entering
3) Pressing the ‘Click to continue reading’ button
Mr White and friends
As the morning approached the inhabitants of Sunset Hills and friends, Dylan could only watch the sun rise with what could be stated as a minimal amount of interest. He had been told that the sunset was a magnificent sight to see but before his eyes lay a simple colour in the form magenta and nothing more. It was a colour that made his skin crawl in a way he couldn’t describe, the feeling like that of a sensual lover licking away the beads of sweat that form in nervous excitement, just with a lot more prickly taste buds getting in the way. The thought screamed uncomfortable.
To distract himself from the growing itch, Dylan decided to turn his eyes to the clock, the two hands and their syncopated movement easing his awkwardness. Despite having done the same action many times before there was something that stifled him this time around. For one, he was no longer within the confined space of a prison cell with people whom rightfully, he shouldn’t have been with. Then there was also the fact that he could be as close to her as he had been in his dreams. Maybe even closer. Whilst some would object to his actions he found them perfectly reasonable – a wave wasn’t going to do anyone some harm was it? His charm never ceased to bring a smile on his face.
But as a blue glow surrounded Dylan’s uneven outline, it was certain that there was one thing he was not aware of or even knew – that the dark skinned young man entering the living room was a lot more worried than willing to give away. 
Posted by S.B. on July 6, 2010 at 12:08 am
I’m completely fascinated! The characters jump right off the page, including some who are not very sympathetic. The writing is wonderful!! The description fits perfectly without overwhelming the narrative, and I love the text/shot ratio and the length. WONDERFUL START!
Yeah, I like the writing style. It’s different, but it definitely works. And the pictures have a unique style that also really works with the sort of distant narrator.
KEEP GOING!!!
Posted by SunsetHills on July 6, 2010 at 6:26 am
Thank you very much S.B! A big virtual hug to you for your support.
It means a lot.
Posted by Phoenix on July 6, 2010 at 7:57 am
Ohhh, I really enjoyed the different perspectives that you had going on here. It’s definitely unique and gives us a different way of looking at the characters. I like how each person has a distinct voice and the way you opened up each character was awesome!:)
I’m really glad that you kept going with this! And your author’s note wasn’t long at all! I’ve seen longer!:P And I enjoy A/N anyways! Keep it up!
Posted by SunsetHills on July 6, 2010 at 3:18 pm
Yay for different character perspectives! I didn’t actually see it like that ’til it was mentioned so thank you. Oh I couldn’t stop this story even in my sleep. It’s nice giving it a try and if it ends up floppy, whatever – at least it was given a shot. (:
Posted by Qui on July 22, 2010 at 10:02 pm
I enjoyed the different perspectives! I could see the wedding planner in front of me, snapping her head back before looking down at her notebook to mumble “It’s Mellissa”. When I can see it happening in front of me, you have me hooked in. I’d say this writing style worked out well.
Posted by SunsetHills on July 23, 2010 at 9:59 am
I think it worked out too. Thank you for reading Qui. (: